Hooking In

WALT: Writing Introduction that orientate and hook in our audience.

First Try:

This term team 4 has a Trade and Enterprise group. There are 6 groups. The aim is to get lots of PT’s and pieces to add to your bank account, Trade and Enterprise means when you buy or make something then sell in a market. My group has been working hard to get good ideas, so the only  thing we've came up with was making M&M cookies and chocolate cupcakes with vanilla icing “YUMMY”. So come on over and get one for 1 PT and buy one free.

With a ?

Do you know what a Trade and Enterprise group is? This term team 4 has a Trade and Enterprise group.There are 5 groups. The aim is to get lots of PT’s and pieces to add to your bank account, my group has been working hard to get good ideas, so the only  thing we've came up with was making M&M cookies and small chocolate cupcakes with vanilla icing “YUMMY” So come on over and get one for 1 PT and buy one free. 

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This term team 4 has a Trade and Enterprise group. There are 6 groups, The aim is to get lots of PT’s and pieces to add to your bank account, my group has been working hard to get good ideas, so the only  thing we've came up with was making M&M cookies and small chocolate cupcakes with vanilla icing “YUMMY”. So come on over and get one for 1 PT and buy one free!

With a fact:

This term team 4 has a Trade and Enterprise group. The aim is to get lots of PT’s and pieces to add to your bank account. Children in team 4 have their own online bank accounts , my group has been working hard to get good ideas, so the only  thing we've came up with was making M&M cookies and chocolate cupcakes with vanilla icing “YUMMY” So come on over and get one for 1 PT and buy one free.